Hi! I think this is the first thread I've made on the Lit board, but I've been here for a while. I need some help with a poem I've been writing for class. I know it's not perfect, but I'm not much of a poet. Constructive criticism welcomed and appreciated!
Liar’s Mask I remember when there was a time It wasn’t a charade. I didn’t have to dance and sing In this liar’s masquerade.
In this masquerade, it seems, You lose sight of yourself. Hiding under various masks, True face decaying on some shelf.
When should I arrive, you ask? Why, whenever it is you wish! But when you enter, you can’t leave Our society’s petri dish.
In the past, there was a time, I once had felt true bliss But that time is over, What an opportunity to miss.
When it wasn’t a performance, I didn’t have to wear some mask. I didn’t used to fake my smiles Like it was some strenuous task.
In life, I once took pleasure, But now, I am afraid, That the darkness has consumed me In this liar’s masquerade
You think I haven’t tried to leave? Oh boy, now that’s a laugh! Everyday that’s what I want Don’t shed tears on my behalf.
I knew what I was getting into, But at the time I was so weak. I couldn’t let the others see me, ‘Else I’d fall to their critique.
I was twelve when I first had donned that mask, Smirk etched into ageless face. It was something which I couldn’t remove, Held in it’s iron-clad embrace.
It was from that day I had decided To never be weak again. So I took that mask into my hands And behind it, hid the pain.
So eat, drink, and be merry, In this no-end masquerade. But know that you will never forget The ultimate price you’ve paid.
