Does any one ever think that fanfictions written by young people like 13 or 12 are actually good fanfictions i need to know if anyone does

I don't usually read fanfics, but I honestly don't think that your age is what matters. You can be young and still write a good story and you can be old and write a shitty story. It's all based on perspective and quality, not age.

>>1 I don't think so, because the writing style is very naive and hopeful, too much fairy tale to be a fanfic

>>3 I didn't write like that when I was that age =/ Which was not too long ago, so no it all has to do with quality and execution of what you've written.

It's probably the experience of the writer. If the person in that age group have experienced a life-changing experience in that time, he/she would have written better stories as they have in depth perspective of pain and suffering of other people. Its because they either realize that the world is not revolving around that person, or that life doesn't have a happy ending. That's why people refer to it as "Childhood ruined" cause people realize that fairy tales aren't real.
Or that person excels at literature. Either way works. I, myself, prefer reading original concept. You have to create your own character and your own world, which probably takes a lot of time. But if you based your own writing on different timelines like medieval times, where royalty, castles, dragons, presumably exists, you've already given the readers of what might to expect in your story. You just need to input more details like the character bio and you got a story.

ok, I'm getting out of topic, so in short, it really depends on that person.

>>4 Link please

>>6 Super short story pie face. Enjoy. Tell me what you think. http://lovelyfortune.blogspot.com/2014/10/red-love.html

>>7 From the poem at the start, you make the character so he can only perceive the world in two colors. This gives the reader that he separates people into good and bad, no in between. But later on, he can see shades of grey, which as every one know symbolizes something in between good and bad. Inconsistent.

From the second to third paragraph, there's already a huge problem. The MC complains about how no one does anything to the people they hate, but in the third paragraph the MC says the reason they don't want to do anything. Showing that the MC doesn't think from other people's point of view and is severely selfish. Not a good MC.

Third paragraph, how can a color remind the MC about fire? They've never seen the color of fire before, so only the shape or sound or feel could remind the MC about fire, never color. INCONSISTENT.

"No one ever noticed me, not even the teachers, that's how hidden I was amongst society." I would personally prefer to use the word "exclude" to make the feeling of loneliness even more prominent.

"When I thought all was hopeless as I looked in her dull, gray eyes she whispered the color in my ear." I don't really like how you used the word "dull" here, because a killer wouldn't have no motive and be lifeless in a story, that's just a horrible story.

From what I can tell, the MC subconsciously some how knew he was going to die, so she (the killer) appeared in his/her dream. But I'm confused on how the killer knew about the whole dream.

Reminds me of Fate/Zero.

>>8 I see what you're getting at at inconsistency, but I think maybe you're reading into it too much. My teacher thought it was amazing, and my one goal is to be satisfied with what I have written and to have someone else enjoy my story as well, even if it's one or a million. I'll tackle some of those inconsistencies. =)

"He can only perceive the world in two colors" I actually never mention anything about two colors. I say he has monochromatic blindness, which means he sees in shades of gray. =/ And I never meant for it to be towards the whole "grey line" of in between. It would have been a completely different story if he had been confused. Symbolism to me is however you make it, not how everyone else perceives it. If you think something, let's say, flowers, represents beauty, and you put a pretty character as your main character who loves flowers. It doesn't necessarily mean you were thinking "flowers means beauty, so my character needs to be beautiful." Not at all. Sure, people do use symbolism, but I don't like to think about that stuff when writing. It isn't genuine to me.

>>Sorry I don't want to type it all out. But your mention on my second paragraph. Are there NOT selfish characters seen in literature??? Also, I'm rereading it, just for reference, but obvi this character can only imagine all the cruel killing he would do, but he can't because he thinks about the consequences. I mean if that wasn't clear, then who are you to say that my story is inconsistent. When I definitely see it flow. Of course, there are people like you who look too deeply into what's being written. =/

>>Third paragraph comments. Well, you see I do see the inconsistency in that. How does something remind him of fire, if he's never seen it. Not too hard actually. I've never seen a picture of Montana, but I know there are mountains there, so if I read something about mountains I would say, "Hmm, that reminds me of Montana." Same exact thing. Just because you haven't seen it doesn't mean you can't associate it with something. I would imagine if I had the same disability and all of a sudden saw the color blue, I would associate it with something very calm, perhaps not the sky, but maybe sand! And you Mr. Symbolism, should know that red equals danger (that's how I was writing it, gosh, I can't believe I still remember this) and if red equals danger, I as the writer, associate fire with danger. I specifically chose fire though, because it's very beautiful. You see fire and know that it's dangerous, yet you want to touch it. That's what that girl was for him. That girl was fire.

>>My comments on your fourth comment. I personally love who people would call depressing characters, just because they're the one's who are actually just realistic, but I can't argue with you on that one. That's all a matter of perception and taste in personality.

>>Fifth comments. Umm, sir, while you're criticizing my work, I'd just like to have you know that "wouldn't have no motive" is incorrect as it is a double negative so the correct wording would be "wouldn't have ANY motive" Umm, no, why not? I think you're characterizing too hard. Also, it's supposed to show how he can't see the color anymore. That it was just this once in a lifetime thing he would experience before he dies. I don't know how much more to explain it to you, but that's as best as I can do.

>>Sixth comment. Well, to be honest, she came out of his dream. I never really built upon that connection. I just wrote it. There was no subconscious knowing he was going to die (see you're reading too much into it, I never meant for that). Basically, he has a dream and she comes out of his dreams. It's like she's warning him basically. She's not real. In fact, he probably doesn't even die. How do you know any of that was real?

Thank you pie face, though, for taking the time to read it and give me your thoughts on the piece, I appreciate it. =) It'll help me improve as a writer as well as helping me question myself before presenting something. Do you want to read another one???

>>9 IT'S FUCKING LITERATURE, HOW CAN YOU READ INTO IT TOO MUCH!!!!

Your exact words said he could only see black and white, so... Meh

The MC doesn't really think much, he hates others because they hate others, making him a hypocrite. What the hell! If he/she just thought about it for a few seconds, he/she would realize how horrible of a person he/she is. I read into things because that's what you do in literature.

That is.... a really good point. I didn't see that.

Meh, all goes.

when you use a comma in between the "full" and "grey", you make it so the "dull" describes the eye and not the color. When someone says "dull eyes", you think they're lifeless eyes, don't you? Maybe "dull grey eyes" could work but that just sounds weird. Double negatives, fuck 'em.

The lockdown? Or was that also part of his imagination, where he isn't part of the dream himself, the only connection being the girl?

A good read, but if I think about it, it turns a bit worse.

A want another.

>>10 there's a total difference between reading into something too much and then just being a pretentious douche who thinks they know exactly what the author meant.

Also, I read it and I don't even see where I say "black and white" so idk where you read that or where I'm missing that.

I can see where you get the hate towards the character. I made him a little bit of a hateful character. Unlikable in a sense. It was so long ago...I really don't remember where I was trying to go with his characterization.

None of this is imagination. This all srsly happened (at least when I was writing it, it did). I can't believe you got this much out of that one story. =/

Lol, should I make a thread for my writing only? That's allowed isn't it? Because I'm currently working on something if you'd like to read it once I'm done with it.

http://lovelyfortune.blogspot.com/2014/10/what-really-happened.html

That's something else I wrote last year. I can't even remember whether I liked it or not, but it was kind of lame. I just wanted to get rid of my writer's block and it was also based on how I felt about my school. =/ I haven't re-read it, but once you do tell me how you feel about it? And honestly pie face, I GUESS you can read into it as much as you want, but understand that I as a writer don't go much beyond what you see.

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I just realized what we discussed was longer than the story itself.

>>11 Typo in 3rd sentence.......................

>>12 heart not eyes omg what a big misunderstanding

>>14 Uh, that just makes the point of that he judges everything to be only good or bad even better....