To be perfectly honest the coldness that i feel is making me numb to the point where my senses are breaking and my lungs aren't the only thing shaking with the fear that has made it so perfectly clear that a path between me and you would stretch through miles upon miles of snow that is left unclear while i still try to break the ice that takes my breath away with the simple grace of the everchanging smile and eyes plain on your face but the smile is only a fantasy that i conjured up hoping that it could be for me while your eyes betray nothing your body still portrays the stiff awkwardness that has made me such a mess and while you're beautiful it's true i just can't see there being a me and you when i see the reflection of my life staring back at me saying that i'm only good enough to ever be alone and to be perfectly honest i honestly halfheartedly agree

Sorry to break this to you, but is this writing? Because to me it sounds like some emo BS. If so, it goes in the Personal board.

Second deffinition of poetry in the webster's dictionary, "writing that formulates a concentrated imaginative awareness of experience in language chosen and arranged to create a specific emotional response through meaning, sound, and rhythm"

I think its pretty good

>>1 Depends on what you intend to use it for. It has no grammar, no punctuation, no capitalization, is unoriginal, relentlessly vague and pointlessly adorned with sappy emotional slop-- I suppose you could use it to try and garner some attention from some uneducated fools that prefer to live in a world of self-imposed misery than real life.

However for the rest of the world and myself, we wouldn't use it to wipe our asses.

It maybe needs a second draft but over all I find it rather interesting. I like the variation of words used to describe the emotions you want the reader to feel. ^w^ Its not bad.

Nice. Needs punctuation. I admire people like you who can share such ideas openly here.

>>5 you were way too harsh...

>>7 Nope, I'm honest. It's the rest of you who are sugar-coating it. I could say that there's something there, say that it needs a little work, but honestly it's trash. No more, no less.