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Writing Help? (5)

1 Name: Leigha Moscove !9tSeSkSEz2 : 2012-06-21 22:29 ID:mgf4ZkGo [Del]

All of my uncompleted stories are going on FictionPress. The only issue, is that some of them are too short for me to actually call them a "chapter" and post them, so I'm making this thread for me to post the beginning of my shorter uncompleted works that I gave up on to ask for ideas from you. I doubt I'll get any help, but I certainly hope I do. The main reason why I need help is because I failed to take notes, so I have no idea what the fuck I was going to do with this. It's all extremely short (mostly only a paragraph) so it can go anywhere. I just need ideas. Character names will most likely change. You'll see why once I start getting stuff posted.

2 Name: Leigha Moscove !9tSeSkSEz2 : 2012-06-21 22:30 ID:mgf4ZkGo [Del]

Here's the first incomplete piece of shit I made. It was a good start and interesting, but I really had no idea or plot line when writing this.

“Why did we have to be chosen to go?” says an unusual girl with shoulder length jet black hair and pointed ears. “Because Dawm we are the two most intelligent people in the kingdom.” Replies a guy with chin length red hair and a mysterious smile. She smiles revealing long pointed teeth “I know but I don’t want to go I love it here in England I can hardly bare to leave.”

3 Name: Leigha Moscove !9tSeSkSEz2 : 2012-06-21 22:41 ID:mgf4ZkGo [Del]

Wow. My writing skills were horrendous. This is the second piece of crap, and it's worse that the first. It's longer than the last one, but obviously a lot needs to be changed. The title was "Fight for the win in Greece." Ignore my mistakes and try to give me ideas?


"Alice we’re almost there." She looked up to a face covered by a black cloak. "Finally. It's been ages." she replied, going into her room. "Now, how do we get to the arena? I have been wishing for a good fight." She grabbed her bonriu and began walking to the door. "Wait, Alice, you can't forget your cloak." he said, holding up a cloak identical to his. She put a firm hand on his shoulder and said "Chase, we are not going to be fighting today. Now leave my protection cloak on the bed and let’s go set camp." She walked out swiftly and went to step onto the lands of an unknown island. "I don't like the feeling of this." said Chase looking at his map "This island is next to Greece and yet it isn't even located on this map." 
"Chase you worry too much! Now sit here and set up the camp while I go get some food."
"Fine Alice, but if you don't come out in fifteen minutes I am coming in to look for you."
"Okay" she said, then ran into the deep forest giggling. Halfway into the woods she saw a cow sitting there perfect for eating. "Looks like we're having steak tonight" she said grabbing her bonriu and kissing it for luck she was prepareing to attack when she heard a voice behind her. "Hunting, I see." She jumped and, right before she could scream, he covered her mouth "It's okay I am not here to hurt you." She pried his hand off her mouth gasping, in shock "Then  what are you here for? What are you doing sneaking up on a girl in the woods?" He laughed "I am just observing that's all."
"Who are you?"
"I am a protecter of this sacred island. I haven't had a guest here in decades; imagine my shock when I see a girl here as beautiful as you."
She began to blush. "I am just here to rest before the big competition in Greece tomorrow is all." He laughed "Yeah, I heard about that. Can I join your group for the competition?" She replied "Why yes you can but..." "But what?" he asked with worry in his voice. "As protecter of this island are you sure you can leave it?" she said, starting to get sad. He replied, flirting "I'm sure the gods won't mind if I leave this island to protect a beautiful girl on a dangerous mission." She giggled, "Okay."
"Hold on one second." he said and disappeared into the forest. She sat on a nearby log and waited. Ten minutes passed and he appeared again with bow and a dead cow smiling, "I figured I owed you one since the other ran off." She smiled and started walking to camp "Cool. So what is your name, anyway?" He replied "It's David. What's yours?" She giggled, "It's Alice." They walked back to the camp and saw that Chase had already set up the tents and started on the fire.
"Hey Chase, meet my new friend and the newest member in our group for the competition his name is David, David this is Chase." They exchanged their greetings and Chase went back to work on the fire while David began preparing the beef. The silence itched at Alice as she tried to break it several times with no result. They ate dinner and she decided to take one more shot at it "So, David, tell us a little bit about yourself." "Like what?" he replied with a full mouth. "Like your abilities, talents, and weaknesses." said Chase, glaring. David swallowed "Well I am an excellent healer-" He was interrupted by a loud screech. Alice looked up, "It is a dragon-" "Dark dragon by the sound of it," David cut her off. "Well don't sit here and decide what made the noise! Let’s go!" Chase said urgently. 
Chase rushed ahead to find the source as Alice grabbed her bonriu ,  David grabbed his bow and arrow as they followed. When they arrived they saw the one and only fifty foot black god dragon. Chase and David gasped in awe as they slowly approached the magnificent beast, and Alice slapped them both on the shoulder playfully "come on this can be perfect practice before the big games! Let’s fight it." She had a big grin and her bonriu was grasped tight. " No, I don't think we shou-" David and Chase began “Splendid!” Alice said gleefully, and began running up to the dragon. “I have a plan. I will jump into it’s mouth and cut it open from the inside because we all know I can’t cut open the scales.” Chase and David gasped in horror “No!” But it was too late; she was inside the dragon and already chopping away at the esophagus “Dang! Who knew the inside was pure diamond?” They sighed. “Can you blow up the heart from this distance?” asked David “it’s the only way to kill him if you can.” “I guess I can try.” replied Chase. He began charging his power and aimed it at the dragons heart from the inside. In three tries he finally got it down the dragon. Alice came out of his mouth, laughing “Sorry guys, I guess that wasn’t very well thought out.”
David looked at the dragon, frightened. “I’m glad to have helped save you and all Alice, but who knows what the price will be for killing this god?” She just giggled “Well, everything happens for a reason.” That night nobody slept well because tomorrow was the big competition. It was the test of all of their strength and wits and they had just gotten a new member and no training together. 
They woke the next morning at, dawn ready to fight, yet none of them had gotten enough rest. Alice was the most eager: “Come on, lets go! I don’t want to miss the big competition.” She was running towards the ship. They made it finally.They sat in the audience to watch the races and fighting, yet nobody knew that the best fighters were not the ones on the field but the ones standing right next to them. For Alice, Chase, and David had taken on the god dark dragon.
They all had their bets Alice was on Gundore, Chase on Frizzler, and David did not have a clue what was going on. They sat and watched, astonished. They simply loved, it but by the end they just all wanted to go home as they ached all over.

4 Name: Meow : 2012-06-22 05:43 ID:39enxsHV [Del]

>>2
No plot line whatsoever? Let's see. They're leaving for what and why? How were they going to reach the where? Think of the answers and write about it.

>>3
So what happens after they went home? How did they get in the tournament? Who are their opponents? Why were they fighting? For honor? Fame? Pride? Why is the dark dragon important (possible arc)?

Sorry for asking too many questions. I hope I can help you generate some stuff for it, using those things there.

5 Name: BarabiSama!!C8QPa1Mt : 2012-06-22 21:32 ID:PNg7XKdl [Del]

Oh god. This reminds me of shit I found on my computer. It was about a bunch of warlock homos in some in-depth fairy tail kingdom. It's weird. I know I didn't write it, but I bought my computer after my brother left, and my mom can't write this well. I don't understand how it's here. Nobody wrote it unless I did it in my sleep.

Oh fuck. Maybe I like... slept wrote my dreams. Who needs sleep walking when you can have sleep writing.

Anyway, I'll give some input in the morning >> Too lazy to read it right now.