This is a little prologue to a story i'm starting. Just want ideas/opinions/critique.. Thank you!

The sun glistened off a thin layer of frost that had settled over the woods during the night, turning everything a hazy shade of white or gray. The wild forest seemed at a standstill, as if everything was holding its breath. The calm before the storm. Deep in the woods, there was a lake, an old broken down shack lay in front of a rickety dock that seemed to be nearly older than the rundown building; the wood on it grey and falling to pieces. At the end of the dock huddled a little form, its black-as-night hair marring the otherwise white landscape. The lake hadn’t frozen over with the frost, and it was the lake that the form seemed to be so enamored with. A hand reached out and caressed the water, shattering the calmness into choppy little waves that resonated nearly to the other side. The figure leaned forward, the tips of its long hair falling to rest in the water. The person stood suddenly, as if a noise had emanated from nearby, but the forest was still cold and silent. The figure looked about warily and took a small step forward, its toes handing over the edge of the dock. The form took one more step forward and plummeted into the icy water.
And all was calm in the forest again.

I like this. It makes me want to read more. I like how you spend time describing the woods before jumping into the story.

>>2 Thank you! My stories are either mostly imagery or mostly dialogue. ^^

I like that story it was good so far. I thought you did good describing your story and i can't wait to read more when your story is finished.

>>3, kinda embarrassed to ask but want to share emails and exchange stories? I've been looking for a fellow writer to do this with.

Very nice! only a few grammar mistakes (: I must say, it's nice to see a fellow writer on here!! "its toes handing over the edge " should be hanging, "seemed to be nearly older" you don't really need nearly,"and it was the lake that the form" and you don't really need to restate the lake. otherwise, very very good! :D

oh and >>5 never be embarrassed of what you write, its a song flowing from your fingertips! and don't fear the muse inside of you! (:

>>4 Oh! Thank you! It probably wont be finished for while, though. XD

>>5 That sounds like a lot of fun! I dont always have time to get on my email everyday, but ill check when i can. :) Its jeremybelpois@att.net

>>6 XD Ah, thank you. My computer has no spell check and i mistype a lot when writing. I went back through and corrected the errors, but it seems it wasnt my flashdrive i saved them on... And i restate the lake on purpose. XD Thank your for the help!

>>7 He was embaressed over asking to exchange stories, not about his stories in general, i dont think. x3

>>8 more like embarrassed about asking for random people's info over the internet. And for future reference I'm a girl XD.

>>9 Oops. Sorry~ XD For future refernce, im a girl too. At least, most days. :P

^Is a joke. I say things like that for the lulz it brings me.

>>10, not a problem, it's kinda hard to tell on here sometimes.
I try to be a girl...mostly XD

>>11 I figure most people can tell by my name. What self respecting guy would put Bree in his screenname? But i was apparently thought of as male..

>>12 i agree, i knew you were a girl right-off-the-bat. but i'm a girl too, Zyshi doesn't seem to be a name with a signified gender...