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Tell me what you think, should i finish it? (10)

1 Name: Izaya : 2011-11-15 08:57 ID:4pv3oRIE [Del]

The boy stood in the middle of the forest panting he stood there hunched over his hands rested easily on his knees trying to catch his breath a small amount of sweat dripped from his nose his eyes shut trying to forget what had happened several hours ago, it was a beautiful morning the boy rolled out of his bed feeling it was going to be a good day, he walked into his bathroom and stripped from his yesterdays clothing and got in his shower scrubbing himself down not liking the feeling of dirt against his pale white skin, he got out of the shower his white soft towel resting around his neck the luke-warm water ran down his toned body though his was not the most fit, he was not the strongest or the fastest, he was just average, he looked in the mirror a smiles spread across his face though when he looked into the mirror his smile slowly faded away into nothing, he sighed remembering why he dreaded leaving his house, his eyes were glowing a bright yellow color, he sighed and walked to his room and pulled out the clothes he decided to where for the day, a grey long-sleeved T-shirt, and a pairs of black pants that sagged past his feet to the ground, his brothers old hand me downs, he put his clothes on and walked to the door putting on his new adidas shoes, he smiles again and looked in the mirror by his front door, he smiled while he put the bandages around his eyes, he grabbed the walking stick by the front door and made his way outside. He walked down the street near the market, he looked around tapping his walking stick on the ground, he had hidden his eyes for over 2 years, he had thought everyone had forgotten about, but after he reached the market a smaller boy about the age of 10 ran up and grabbed the bandages on his face and gave them a forceful tug and ripped them from his face, the kid smiled wickedly and ran off yelling while he ran. “FREAK!” The bandages fell to the ground slowly, several people walked over to him and with sympathy asked him if he was alright, but he wasn’t they would see his eyes and they would remember who he was, he smiled lightly and nodded his head speaking softly, his voice seemed calm though he was enraged at the boy and scared that if anyone saw his eyes they would shun him like they did 2 years ago. “Yes, I’m fine; I’ll be on my way.” He spoke as he leaned down and picked up his bandages and made his way through the crowd, but someone had other plans for him, a gentleman in the middle of the crowd stuck his leg out tripping him, he hit the ground with a loud thud, his hand left his eyes revealing their bright glow, everyone gasped almost simultaneously. One woman from the back yelled out. “It’s him!” everyone grumbled and walked away, when 2 cops approached him and spoke with a stern tone. “Please come with us” The boy sighed and nodded at the 2 cops and walked with them thinking they were going to take you to the police station. You followed the men without out a word, after a few minutes you saw the police station and were approaching it, though when you and the police reached the station they kept walking. The boy stopped assuming they were stopping as well. The guard from behind grunted and shoved the boy to the ground and shouted at him. “Keep moving!” The boy hit the ground and yelped in pain landing on his arm, though he got up quickly like the guard instructed and kept walking, his mind began to wonder, and he spoke with a soft tone hoping to get an answer instead of a physical assault again. “W-Where are we going?” His voice cracked when he spoke but he was able to get the question out. One of the guards turned back with wicked smile which took all of the air from the boys lungs. “We’re taking you to a-“ The guard paused for a moment his smile was gone as he looked around as if he heard something that alerted him, you heard it to but you didn’t want to say anything out of fear. “We’re taking you to a ‘special’ place in the woods to question you about your family, and if you don’t answer the way we like, we have the authority to… Persuade you.” The guards breathe taking smirk returned as he turned around and continued walking.

2 Name: Misuto!M4ZBq07Cs. : 2011-11-15 12:05 ID:8DVZXMAC [Del]

Before I start reading, good lord, you couldn't have spaced it out with paragraphs at all?

3 Name: Seika Chugo : 2011-11-15 20:09 ID:pccFUuyN [Del]

Well, it IS Izaya, King of the Trolls lol

4 Name: Reisa : 2011-11-15 21:04 ID:HG0xB0Zv [Del]

It was pretty good. I think you should finish it if you have a direct idea of where the story is going.

5 Name: The Malfoy : 2011-11-16 09:16 ID:6SGYRRvT [Del]

lol itz good i like it!

6 Name: Alice : 2011-11-17 08:15 ID:j3HlGaUA [Del]

I like this story it's good so far.

7 Name: Izaya : 2011-11-17 15:18 ID:4pv3oRIE [Del]

I am going to finish it somtime, but i dont know when, I don't have much time to write anymore, and the reason i didn't put it in paragraph form is because i didn't ave time while posting it.

8 Name: Izaya : 2011-11-17 15:18 ID:4pv3oRIE [Del]

I am going to finish it somtime, but i dont know when, I don't have much time to write anymore, and the reason i didn't put it in paragraph form is because i didn't ave time while posting it.

9 Name: Alice : 2011-11-18 18:03 ID:j3HlGaUA [Del]

well when you have time to finish your good story. I hope you post it because it's good and i would love to read your finished story

10 Name: Izaya : 2011-11-22 08:21 ID:4pv3oRIE [Del]

>>9 thank you, but it won't be done for a while, I plan to make it semi long.