hey pals I am submitting this poem in for class but i need to know if it's too deep for that please do tell me thanks

You want poetry?
Keep me awake
Til 3 AM
Til I’m flooded with sadness and memories
And sleep deprived
Then I will give you a beautiful story
Made in a way
You will hear it as a song
And your mood will solemn
You want poetry?
Wait for the days
Where my eyes are filled with tears
And on those days
I’ll give you a symphony
You want poetry?
Then you must first make me feel
empty.

try to end with an ending type low sound and in my opinion i think it's good!