Hey guys I'm writing a sort of bittersweet romance, horror, and action story and I thought I'd get your opinion on what I have so far
The Golden Darkness
“My life was nice, peaceful, happy… and snatched away in an instant”, ‘this woman, just who is she?’ I think to myself as a sharp pain in my neck increases. Everything feels fuzzy, as if all of my strength is being sucked out of me. All I can see is… blonde, a woman’s long, blonde hair. My hand feels wet and warm and I hear a soft voice, “You’re bleeding to death but don’t worry, when you wake up everything will be fine.”
(12 hours prior) “Tetsuo! Tetsuo where are you?” I hear a voice in the distance, “I’m in fa baffvroom!” I choke as I brush my teeth. I then pause to see myself in the mirror, taking note of my shaggy hair and thinking about getting a haircut in a few days. “There you are!” A girl with blue eyes and dyed blue hair, smiling like there wasn’t a single thing wrong in the world, this girl that causes a smile to spread on my face every time I see her, is Mariko. “C’mon hurry up we’re gonna be late!” she pulled on my arm, “Calm down its graduation day we have an extra hour until it starts!” I pulled back, she must’ve tripped or something because we both fell on my bathroom floor, my toothbrush falling out of my hand.
I looked up to Mariko sitting on top of me, she was heavy, but I didn’t really care. She was so cute from this angle; I couldn’t help but blush a little bit. “You’re heavy, Mariko.” I grunt as I try to get her off of me, she puts her hand on my chest, we look into each other’s eyes, and she starts to get closer to me. “I wanna get this day over with so we can start our lives together” she smiled at me, “Same her-” I start but she then kisses me midsentence, I then remember the ring I gave her a few months ago.
The time was spring; Mariko and I were leaving our part- time jobs together, the moon illuminating her as we walked. “Say, Mariko…” I started, “Yes? What’s up Tetsuo?” “What would you think?” I started rustling through my pockets, “If we got married?” I pulled out a black ring case and opened it, inside was a diamond ring and a note saying ‘Please?’ I then got on one knee and said “After we graduate, will you marry me?” She started blushing, clearly embarrassed I stammered “I-it’s just that we’ve known each other since we were like 5 and have been dating since the 8th grade!” there was a long silence between us, I was starting to get scared that she’d reject me and lowered my head, maybe I was taking everything too fast? “Yes” was all that I heard from her as I held my head down, my eyes widened and my heart started pounding faster than ever as I looked up to her, she was smiling that smile that I loved so much. Her face red and tears welling up in her eyes she said it again, “Yes. After we graduate, I’ll gladly marry you, Tetsuo Ishima.”
And since then we’ve been living ‘together’ in the sense that she lives up the street and never leaves unless her parents make her. Even then she’ll cling to a pole and try to stay here, it’s all playful though, and she loves her parents and is really happy that they will let us get married. “Tetsuo! Hurry it up!” she yelled to me from the hallway, I sat on my bed and put my shoes on, getting up and slinging my bag around my back, I looked behind me to the desk beside my bed, it was covered in various drawings and school notes, sitting untouched on the left corner however, was a photo of me and Mariko. She was on my back in a piggy back position and holing up the ‘peace’ sign, “Just a little more time.” I smiled as I walked out of the door and left my home.