Well, I couldn't decide on a title for this manga, but here it is:

In the year 2038A.D. The apocalypse is in full swing, an asteroid had struck the Earth, killing hundreds of millions of people, and devastated the world. However, through all the destruction, the human race struggled, and rose from the rubble, only to look up to the sky and witness that the very gates of Hell had opened, flooding the world with demons from all throughout history, from all the lands. All the false gods of the Greek, Roman, Norse, and Egyptian Mythologies, along with beings, once thought to be myths themselves, Vampires, Succubi, Kappa, etc. With that, Hell was full with souls, and the dead began to rise as well, and feed off the living. Essentially all Mythologies were coming to life.

The humans new they stood little to no chance, but fought bravely, Until one day, a man named Kane had made a pact with the most fearsome, and most powerful demon that had escaped hell, the Razgriz. With the pact, They had joined into one, and Kane had led the Humans to survival, then to victory over the demons. Towards the end of the war, it is realized that the demons were not invading Earth, they were escaping hell, and so communication between demons and humans had begun, which led to peace. However, Kane was thought to be corrupted by the Razgriz, and soon became mad with power. He had developed a control collar to enslave the demons. However, a rebellion had broken out, and humans and demons had fought together to overthrow Kane. It is said, that the power of the Razgriz could not be contained in Kane's fragile human body, thus destroying him from the inside out. And so, humans and demons share the world, living side by side, though not always peacefully.

Now, the year is 1682 A.A. (after Apocalypse) The land masses of Earth had reformed into one land, save for a few islands, Most elements have changed due to the asteroid (making guns and electronics useless), and one new element had been introduced called "Stained Merin" Which can act as a fuel, but must be mined.

And So, our story is about to begin next time in part 2.







Well, that's the back story of my manga, what do you think? any tips, suggestions, changes or title?

1st, just for the regional difference, unless of course you're japanese, it would be a comic/graphic novel, not a manga; though this really seems to be a preference thing, alot of folks can't stand people confusing the two.
It is a really interesting story though, seems like something I would read. Has potential.
For a title, some of the cleverest titles aren't thought up in the beginning, but actually the end, and have something to do with a key element of the story, even if it doesn't make sense at first; so you might want to hold out on the title until you have more of it written.

The only tips I can give you are tips I got from the author and artist of Peach Fuzz; and that would be to write it out move by move in story format before you draw the pictures for it.
You can choose to write it as a novel first and then re-write it as a script to base the panels off of, but eitherway, the most important part of any kind of visual story (theater, animation, acting, children's books, etc.) is the script.

Would anyone like to read more about it?

Yeah, sure :)

Very well, Part 2:


So now you know the back story, As time progressed, after Kane's death, there was now a vacuum of power, in which created warlords who served under Kane. However, the struggle for power had separated, and weakened them all, until they all settled in their own territory. After 1,682 years, one such warlord receives and unwelcome visitor.
The main door to the fortress opens and a figure walks through. The Reptilian guards rush towards him, "Who goes there?!" shouts one, "Such a cliche question, anyway where's Warlord Bartlett?" One guard extends his forearm blade and holds it to his throat, "The only way you'll see him is in a body ba-" he was cut off as he was cut down, sliced right through in three segments by the stranger's Sword. The remaining two guards stared in shock at the body of their fallen comrade, "I...I didn't even see it!" exclaimed one. Enraged, they attack, only to follow their brother.
After a half-hour of navigating through a maze, the stranger finally came to a room, with only one window up top, and standing there was the Warlord, Bartlett. "Well!" he bellowed, "I'm surprised you made it through in such a short time! What is it that you want?" "My name is Kurt. Are you the one sending demons to attack villages, so that you can offer your 'protection'?" "So what if I am? What is it to you?" he laughed, Kurt sighed, I'm here to negotiate, to get you to stop." Now Bartlett laughs louder, "And What if I don't?" a smirk came across his face, "Then I would have to stop you with force." Hearing this, Bartlett burst into laughter. "Well, you can certainly try now, can't you? Well, here's a little surprise for you, those guards you killed along the way were the lowest and weakest demons under my employ! Now this one..." he pulls a lever, and a grate opens to Kurt's left, "This one, is a real keeper." Kurt looked into the dark opening, about the size of a cabinet door, and in the darkness, two glowing eyes appeared, followed by a figure as it crawls out, first the arms, then legs, it crawled out like an animal, on all fours.
Kurt looked rather surprised, for it was a young woman, with catlike ears and a tail, with vicious eyes, and claws, having a beautiful, yet feral look about her, dressed in rags. She hissed at him as she looked up to her master, "Kill him" Bartlett commanded as he pressed a button on a panel next to him. Instantly, she pounced at Kurt, swiping her claws, however he was barely quick enough to avoid it. As he reached for his sword she swiped again, knocking the sword from his hands, "Oh shit..." he said, dodging her attacks, and blocking her strikes. He managed to grab hold of one hand, then the other, however, she was strong and he couldn't keep hold for long, so Kurt pulled her close, and kissed her. Shocked, she pushed away, and attacked in a different manner, clawing, and kicking. It was every thing he could do to avoid her attacks. Then he catches her right arm, then her left, crossed, and kissed her again. Again, she pushed away, now filled with fury, she attacks even faster, sweeping him off his feet and onto his back, She pounces, pinning him to the floor, and as she raises her hand to strike, he reached up and kissed her a third time. Now the girl was beginning to feel confused, and stayed her hand. "What are you doing you bitch?! Kill him!" Bartlett shouted as he press a second button, and a buzzing sound came from the control collar around her neck, and she began to wither in pain, screaming. "You are a disappointment, I was told you were the best money could buy, but looks like I've been cheated. I have no use for you." he said as he pulled a lever, and water began to poor into the room, as the floor began to open.
They had both fallen through, into an under ground river, where towards the end, a waterfall. At the last moment, Kurt grabbed onto a tree root sticking out of the cliff side, but had seen the girl flow past her. He reached out, and grabbed her arm, staying her for a moment until she thrashed at him, the collar was still shocking her, She cut his arm and lost his grip, but reached again and grabbed the collar, a jolt of pain went through his arm and was about to lose his grip until the collar snapped. Before she could fall though, she grabbed onto his arm, and climbed up onto a ledge. Kurt was surprised that she came back to help him up on the ledge. "Thanks" he said, out of breath, she sat by the wall of the ledge, staring at him. After catching his breath, he looked around and saw that they were just outside the fortress. "I don't suppose you know how to get back in there do you?" he asked, she nodded and motioned him to follow her, they went though yet another maze, and ended up in a hallway, at the end, there was a door. As they opened it, it was the control room for the area they were just at, and sitting in a chair, was Warlord Bartlett, looking shocked at the sight of them, "What are you doing?" he shouted, "Kill him!" he activated the control collar, "Oh, you looking for this?" Kurt said, tossing him the broken collar, a look of terror crawled upon his face as he looked at his former slave. Kurt noticed this terror, and had seen the deadly smile on the girls face, and put two and two together, "You want me to wait outside?" he asked, and she nodded, not taking her eyes off the fat warlord, "No, please! I'll do anything you want! I'll stop my scams, I'll pay you anything!" Kurt closed the door, and leaned against it. Almost instantly, the cries of begging turned to horror, and there came the sounds which no living thing was meant to hear, the ripping of flesh, pathetic begging, breaking of bones, and sobbing.
Kurt took out a lollipop, "Really picked a bad time to quit smoking" he said as the screams went on for about an hour, from time to time, he felt the door being pushed open, but he held it shut, by leaning on it. After the screams stopped, the door opened, and the once beautiful cat girl was covered, head to toe in blood. Kurt looked into the room, blood stained all the walls, and a clump of flesh was in the middle, but looking closer, he could see that the warlord was still breathing, but probably not for long. "(whistles) Remind me not to piss you off!" he said as he walked with her out of the fortress.
Outside, they walked down the road to where Kurt had set up a rest area before. "You wait here, I'll be right back." he said as he took off down the road. The Girl looked around, and found a stream. Looking in the water, she sees she is covered in blood, so she disrobes and enters the stream, washing herself. Hearing a noise, she turns to find Kurt, who turns around as quickly as she ducked into the water. Walking backwards, he sets down some clothes, "I know these may be too big, but it's better than wearing those rags." he said as he went back to the campsite. After dressing in the jeans and t-shirt he left, she cautiously walked towards the camp, and sat down opposite of Kurt by the fire, which was cooking some fish. He handed her one, and she took it, being very timid. "So, now that all that's done, what's your name?" he asked, it took a while for her to think, it had been so long since she said her name, until finally, she said, "Mi.....Mira" her voice was raspy and sore, from the shock of the control collar. "Alright, Mira, you don't have to talk just yet. It's getting late, we should rest for the night." he said, handing her his sleeping bag. She fell asleep instantly, from the softest thing she had felt in years.