I've been writing a book for some time, but I keep getting writer's block. So i'm looking for ideas. It could really be anything, I just need some kind of insparation. Do you guys think you could give me a thought or two?

Here's the prologue to give you a better idea of what I'm writing. (It's a bit bad because I haven't gotten the chance to edit it yet)

Prologue:

Hokkaido, Japan
Year 2023
19:27

Silence hovered in the air as the wind blew through out the thick forest. Rin felt like something was odd, something that no one in the small cottage that lied deep within the forest could exactly put their finger on.

It was always silent there, as the family of three was secluded from all of civilization, besides from a few exceptions. Supposedly this home never existed to the prying eyes of outsiders. But the silence that lied in the air tonight was different. The 16 year old twins, and their grandfather were in hiding from a group that threatened their existence. Tsukiko and Rin were special, they held something that the organization called 'Despairs' wanted. They possessed very strong magical powers that if fallen into the wrong hands, could destroy the human race. It would bring chaos and terror, tainting the pure everywhere you turned.

The two girls were as suspicious as their grandfather. They knew something was off.

As if on cue, a gunshot echoed through the trees, the silver bullet hitting their grandfather, who was looking out the window at the time. It embedded into his chest, and he collapsed to the foor. The blood soaked through the shirt, a dark shade of crimson blossoming at an alarming pace. Both girls stood still as shock, terror, and anger flowed through their veins.

The shattered glass of the window covered the bleeding man. Before being able to check on the old man’s condition, people burst through the doors. They wore cloaks, hoods made shadows covering their eyes and nose, and Tsukiko and Rin instantly knew who they were.

Despairs.

Before being able to react properly, Rin turned to see her sister being beaten by one of the Despairs that had a knife. Tsukiko screamed in pain, snapping Rin out of her trance, who in turn launched herself at the apparent woman.

Another hooded figure tackled Rin, leaving the woman an opening for escape. Tsukiko, herself, was faring just as well as her twin, if anything, worse. She struggled as two men pin her down, trying to put a cloth soaked with chloroform to her nose and mouth. As Rin watched further, she saw her kick one of them off. The other one tried to pin her down, but she kept writhing in his grasp, and he failed to get a proper hold on her.

With a grunt of pain, she headbutted him, and he went down.
Rin panics at the sight of Tsukiko. She had a bloody nose, and looked like she was barely fighting to stay conscious. Taking action, she kicked the man in the throat to see him fail to gasp for air. The woman then caught Rin's attention by coughing once. A shine of something made her eyes dart to her sister's throat. A blade.

Tsukiko’s eyes widened, and Rin knew that if she were to even move an inch, Tsukiko dies. The fight was over. With a sinking feeling of defeat, she barely noticed someone from behind roughly place a sack over her head, and handcuff her. Before her eyesight was taken away, she saw someone put a cloth soaked with chloroform put up to her sister’s mouth and nose. It looked like a deadly amount of chloroform, as if they needed the situation to become any worse than it already had.

As Rin is walked to what seems to be a van, she tries to verbally attack the person in between her sobs. Her colourful language was soon stopped with a gag and a blindfold in replace of the sac that was once upon her head.
What seemed to have been good day has become a day of despair.

The van drove off into a distance in the night to a place of the unknown. The two bodies in the back shaken side to side as they swerved, avoiding all the trees in their path, something that seemed to be nearly impossible.
It felt like hours to the conscious twin until her sibling woke up. Tsukiko was disoriented and scared. All they had was each other, now. If one were to lose the other, there would be nothing left for both.

Quietly, Tsukiko and Rin held hands trying to comfort the other. The two were too in too much shock to even think of a way to escape the grasps of their enemies. All they now could do was hope for some miracle to happen, giving them a chance to escape, unfortunately, that chance never came to them on the night they might have needed it the most.


Even critiques are great! I would greatly appreciate your thoughts and ideas, thank you.

There are few grammatical errors and some spelling mistakes but still a good read. Your explanation is kind of vague, probably because its just a prologue. If you reread your work, you'll be able to find your mistakes easily.

Probably the best for this to continue is character development. Since they're twins, you need to make sure how to distinguish the character from the other. Usual traits of twins in stories are that they contradict with each other. Well it depends on how you use the character's personality, so I leave you with that to decide. You need to further explain the plot or the reason why "despairs" killed their grand father and kidnapped them. And the purpose of the characters in the story.
In my perspective, you're already a great writer. So keep up the good work.

>>2 Thank you for the great feed back! There are a lot of grammatical errors that I will have to revise in the future. And yes, as for the twins, in the chapters, it will seem as if they are the same, but the opposite in every way.

The plot was interesting but it was vaguely explained... It could catch the reader's attention till the middle part, but they could get a little lost in the sittuation on the setting (like, where are they brawling? Or How many hooded people entered the house).

But remember that vague clues makes the reader think and read into the story further.. it entices one's curiosity in a way, which is good, in my perspective... I think you just have to put more words to it but not to the point that it apoils everything to the reader.

I would love to read this once it's done or if you've progressed writing it long enough... I like the mysterious feel to the twins and the fact that they possed something really powerfull..

I hope this help, even by a little.. since I'm also writing a novel, well. I have not made any progressed yet because of school and such.. so yeah.. I hope we can show each other's work sometime.. ^﹏^

>>4 Thank you for the advice, this will really help me! Honestly, I still haven't really edited anything, so it is still a bit rough on the edges, and need some tweaking in the plot and wording. And that's awesome! One day, I would like to read your novel!