>>2>>2 Well, well, well. It's seems your opinion about the subject shakes your core person.
Well, I'll actually agree to many perspectives your criteria calls for. After all, it's no complex piece of work to know it's filled with rambles. Of course, the piece wasn't even involving anything to say about the "story" in general. Since really the story is what it is. People meeting people.
Well only that's what some would call it, but it's the fact each individual is a story. Walking pieces of words regarding the past, present, or future of themselves. And what truly gets the story woven is that strange mixture of perspective that my story was to be about.
Cause often it's the little things that create the big impacts of what a story needs. It's seems wasteful, obscene in what your opinion could say. But, it's what my story is, to see the person more then what is relevant to the "basis of the story" from your opinion. Since, in this work of mine, the characters are the most important to follow first.
The story didn't make sense?
I’ll go to say that was quite an obvious thing to pick out. It’s dumps to a certain point without much of clear conscious of what is going on or what at all. No further in depth of the characters or the world around them. Just the words they say. Right?
Now, of course you may already know this, and of course I'm no vain ideological wannabe writer. After all, I said it would be a novel cause the story would need more words then what 30 thousand could account for. And since I love my wonderful world of imagination, I would go to great lengths create it. (Which I have been working on for some time)
So, to get back to this. I do enjoy the criticism. Your opinion was very much well deserved. If anything, to be acknowledged was what I first intended to do. Which went well over my expectations to say the least. Which is good.
The writing style was made to be so.
Cause if the writing style wasn't to par to what you think, then I would say it wasn't to me either. A quick draft, minimal editing intervention. Things in the work I would love to add paragraphs into or some changes. All the facts that my own writers intuition would be alarmed at. But, out of the blue I let it off like this.
Why? Well, I love writing like it’s a game. And this was an experimental game. And I would say I enjoyed it.
Which to say, It wouldn't be too quick to judge the overall idea of my story as something that’s an adept piece of writing. Since the story hasn't been covered, right?