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1 Name: Yaro Shien !lvlf3wVa7U : 2012-03-27 11:47 ID:1Iw8Z2Vn [Del]

I just started writing a book for some strange reason. So tell me how is the first chapter.


Chapter1: Me and The Faction
It started by just one, and the rise of many more. This world is now in chaos because of one human mistake. I am Jack Mudo Zaringtion and I am “Subject Zero”. A willing teen of 17 that was use to perform in a human modification experiment. The experiment was to test the “Vaccine” and “Z-cells”. The people that were experimenting were a large organization called the “Faction” a giant corporation hidden by secrets of many countries. I was the first to ever successfully be merged with both the Vaccine and Z-cells.

The Faction was full of people that wanted evolution and the ideals of the longest living humans to walk the earth. I remember the first person I met in the Faction that was just like me, her name was Johan R. Darigun. She was a year younger than me; she was “Subject 2”. She was a couple inches shorter than me, had brown hair and well her physic was superb. Johan’s personality was like any other girls kind of sweet and strong willed.

Unlike her I was a bit blunt to begin with. I hated these white cloths, because they were so bland and plain. But, Johan and the others said, “It’s to define that no one is different here.” With a happy tone of voice. The Faction was full of doctors that looked distinctly disgustful and dark. There was a few that look nice and cheerful, so I greeted them with a slight bow and continued on walking past them. The Faction building was huge and never seemed to end. I would walk around for hours and hours finding a new place to let my thoughts escape myself.

But, I did not just stay there, I trained. I was told that if I can control my new found power I can go on missions outside this building. There was nothing more than that which let me outside this god forsaken white prison. So I was asked “What kind of weapons would like to train with Jack?” so I responded” A scythe, a gun and a sword.” The seemed dumbfounded as I smiled like a demon. “As you wish young master, I will have our finest crafters create your weapons.” And soon I was handed the most perfect weapons created for my own personal use.

The Scythe was named “Chaos”, it was doubled edged on the in and outside the blade and it continued a little back and had a bit of a axe like figure coming from behind. The Gun was called “Fear”, the barrel was about a foot long and the clip held about twenty bullets and the look of it was demonic. As for the sword I named it “Zero” because to was like me, a man made creation. The metal used to make these weapons was made out of Zeriltainadim, indestructible and when used for an edged weapon, can cut through diamond like a hot knife through butter.

The training sessions were brutal and almost deadly. Fortunately, I healed quickly and was able to do things that no normal human can do. This was one result to the Z-cells; I was a prodigy, a person with undeniable power. Even then, there were the others, like Subject 3. He was Green Beret that accepted the treatment, he uses nothing but guns and knives, when we batted it were fierce. After training he would say,”Fight to the bitter fucking end and when we fight again I will win.” Then it was Johan, a dual blade wielder. She was the only one that could put up a good fight, the only one that I enjoyed fighting.

After training I went to eat and then to go see Dr. Marshal, one of the developers of the Z-cells. She was one of the nice ones to me, treated me more like a son than just Subject Zero. She was tall, kinda busty, glasses, long blond hair and sometimes a dunce. “Okay Jack, lie down on the scanner here and let me check your vitals and do you have your blood samples today?” She asked. “Ya, here, you know I am staring to get a little too annoyed by these tests.”I said with a joke like tone. “Well I can make it twice a day if you want.” Smiling, “Oh god no” I snapped. ”Jack we do these test to be sure the cells don’t start rejecting you.” assuring me, but I was a bit ticked off about this. “Okay, your all good, no rejection and to be honest, looks like the cells are perfectly in sync with yours, but I need to do the mental test. Have there been any changes in your mental health, anything at all?”
“Well no, but...”I paused
“But what?” With concern
“Well I have been getting more and more of these weird dreams about Johan.” with question.
“Subject Two, well you are a still a teen and a guy so this is just a natural change that all boys get at your age.” She was reassuring me again. “Well you check out fine, oh and I heard the head is gonna let you start working, congrats.”
I look up and smiled,” Thank you, and when I get out I’m gonna get something to bring back to you, for all the help you provided.”
“Then I can’t wait for your present.” She started laughing.

I left the room, to go explore the building a bit more and then I met him, Subject One. He was the son of the Head of the Faction, only nine years old. He was pretty small for his age, had white hair, blue eyes, and apparently he was going to die from an unknown disease. If not for me he would have died, because the Vaccine helps retain the Z-cells that reconstruct the body without it breaking down, then building the body stronger than it will ever be in the time it would take a million years of evolution. So in the basis, if I was never tested he would never get the treatment and would have died.
He was only playing with a ball and then he saw me. “Hello there are you Subject Zero? You can lie to me I can read your mind.” Smiling at me.
“Uh Ya, but how can you read my mind” I was curious to know.
“The Z-cells give us powers you just have to find out yourself, oh and thank you for doing the experiment even though you didn’t seem you had much else to do…”still smiling.
“STOP IT! Kid I know what I was doing, just don’t say anything more. I did myself a favor you were just the repercussion. Now go before I feel less generous.” I angrily snapped.
He stood there and began walking away then I heard his voice in my head,”Good, get angry, your gonna want to do that later, but it won’t be me who you will be angry at.” Little did I know he was right.

2 Name: AnubisTheMuse : 2012-03-27 16:42 ID:5h0YCiei [Del]

It's kinda confusing. At some points it sounds like he's telling a story and at others like he's just talking about his average day. And the last part is weird and you should start a new paragraph every time someone new speaks.

It does sound interesting though.

3 Name: TPWNW : 2012-03-27 22:44 ID:WbIbOkUN [Del]

Sounds a lot like resedent evil