1 Name: Ogono : 2015-08-26 16:39 ID:JLkjaE1b (Image: 600x836 jpg, 730 kb) [Del]
Hello family :). I've been in the dollars since a few years ago as the username Hiro...there's probably so many Hiros on here now. Anyway, I'd like you guys to give me feedback on my first manga/comic. Recently this year, I've started Practicing and learning a few things.
Here's a link to my webcomic, I hope you enjoy! I'd really like it if you spread this to your friends as well. MOST IMPORTANTLY, I'd like your feedback!
http://tapastic.com/episode/184598
2 Name: Siren !SzqYl/82/w : 2015-08-26 16:45 ID:AceFzfZ4 [Del]
Impressive for a first go - original and very interesting aesthetic. Feedback wise, I think it's important that you should go over your dialogue as it doesn't feel "natural" at some points. Basically, before you write a reply, think if it would sound "normal" in real life - say it out loud and find out! It's really simple but it will help you a lot I think/hope! :) Obviously the more you do the better it will get, so keep at it!
3 Name: Ogono : 2015-08-26 16:51 ID:JLkjaE1b [Del]
That was quick! lol, thanks for the feedback! I feel when I kept rewriting I'd get too caught up in the technical stuff. So, Natural! Got it! :)